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Willow Crane's avatar

That's a fun, twisty little pulp mystery — the "scared to death" reveal is a good payoff, and the coaster-as-anagram device gives it a nice puzzle-box feel even if it leans a bit far-fetched by design. Good atmospheric setup in that bar too. Carried with care!

Colin Devonshire's avatar

Thank you. Now, what’s next? Thailand is full of real and make-believe tales.

Willow Crane's avatar

You are welcome! Sounds awesome!

Joan Livingston's avatar

Another enjoyable mystery.

Colin Devonshire's avatar

Again, thanks for reading and commenting.

AleXnDerDGiray8TedApE's avatar

An expat man getting milked by a local dancer. You made a common trope sound interesting. I thought it flowed well, and was easy to read but there are a tiny few lines that could be tightened up if you are interested in feedback.

Colin Devonshire's avatar

Are you an editor?

AleXnDerDGiray8TedApE's avatar

Plumber.

AleXnDerDGiray8TedApE's avatar

Lilith Fayre.

Douglas McClenaghan's avatar

Cults are always interesting. I like the links to folklore and the supernatural, so that your stories have an exotic, tantalising, but forbidding atmosphere.

Colin Devonshire's avatar

Thanks for your comments. Today is my wife’s birthday - there is a story in there!